October Girl

Ooooh the title drew me in!!! And the story didn't disapoint!!! :] I like it..... what are you reading my crit for? Get to work wirting the next one!!!! -Max

hmm, nice. Affraid that all I can really say :lol: -Max

hmm, I like it, Nice SCL. Something new and fresh finally :D your friend, as always -Max

hmm, nice very nice. I like it, although I'm not much help for grammer errors or what goes where I'm just her to tell you, I liked it :D

Aww! PA!!! I love this it's just so... awesome and so... you! -Max

Thank you for the heads up. Other wise I would have been like "you need a coma here. Period here. You're not using proper grammer here." lol just kidding. This ...

Hmm, very interesting i think this is very good.... very good indeed. Never heard or read a poem about the sun this was very good.

Ooooh I like it, very good very good indeed. I could feel the emotion and the character... swell, jolly good show. I enjoyed it ^_^ -Max

this was.... powereful.... disterbing.... umm..... ok I guess.

Hmmm, very well done. I like this,are you going to write more? The title caught my eye so I thought I'd take a look. Nice work Angel! -Max

For your first time, it's pretty good Flem. Congratz lol. Well there's nothing for me to tear up since everyone else already tore it up. But I lied it.... if ...

hmm, *smiles* nice. Why do I get the feeling you like plants? Hmm? :wink:

ah Kristen Stewart is so amazing she's the girl who's going to play Bella in Twilight. Ah I love speak it is very powerful!!!

Hmm, I love this message and I think it could be a better poem I disagree with Suzann. (sorry Suz) but I liked both the poem and messgae... but then ...

hello, well I do like this poem, it's pretty great. But, I did catch some errors. In the fourth staza you wrote i, not I you see? Well that's the ...